042 City Cam: Session 3 Analysis B

Session 3 theme:
Take a picture that signifies "New Birth, New Life" and submit it with a short essay (not more than 200 words) that explains how your picture describes the theme.

Session 3 rules:
1. Picture must be submitted by sunday 15th of December, 2013 (we had an extension to 16th december, so the pictures that came in then, still count)
2. Picture must be original and taken by the contestant within the time frame of the competition (10 days)
3. The picture should be of non-human elements.
4. The essay must not be more than 200 words.
5. The picture must be meaningful to the essay and theme.
6. The analysis and judgement of TobeDadiva is final.
7. Winners Must be available in Enugu between the 20th of December and 30th of december 2013.

Here are the entries and analysis Cont'd

C15:    Sometimes, less is more. If she had written less, she would have achieved a greater depth with her words. If she had taken the picture of a single flower bud, she would have had a more sticking photo.

C16:    I like the simplicity of his words but I think it leaves too much to imagination. I wish the picture had focuses more on the pollen though. I am very curious as to the device he captured this picture with…would be interesting to meet him and see.

C17:    So apparently, Augustine is a white guy with large hands and he has chosen to write about his new born puppy. SMH….is originality so hard?

C18:    This entry lost me at the 2^nd paragraph. The picture is lovely but the write up takes away from the depth. Perhaps if the write up had related the chicks to the start of life and natural instinct to feed and survive, it would have stood a chance.

 C19:       We can all see that he got this photo off the internet. Moving on

C20:    Words like ‘procreation’ totally destroy the depth of a written piece. His essay feels like a ramble and the picture looks to me like ‘mama goat’ is scolding one prodigal ‘kid’ or is worried about how she will get him to come over to where she stand. If this was a theme about a mother’s love, this picture might have stood a chance.

C21:       I don’t even have the word for this…SMH

C22:     I wish he had related the masquerade tree to the sunrise…or even the clouds. But instead, he seemed to ramble in his essay. I like the picture though…the angle is very interesting and captures what a lot of people see when they look in the morning…including a roof top, high tension cables, clouds…I like the picture.

C23:    Again, this picture speaks more of a mother’s love than of new life. The write up is not deep or inspiring.

C24:     200 words is all that was asked. The essay is too long and dreary. The picture doesn't even relate to the essay…where are the oaks, the forest, the luminous leaves??!!!

C25:    I love this. A deep and meaningful write up. The photo seems real but I wish it wasn’t staged…oh why didn’t he take a picture of a sprouting seedling in a pot or the earth???? *sad* Howewver, the photo and the write up relate perfectly and give so much depth to the theme.

 C26:  So far, this has been the most painful write up to read. The grammar and sentence construction is just painful to assimilate. Ubesie seems to have a hard time sticking to rules by the way…all 3 sessions, he has competed and in all 3 sessions, he broke the rules. 200 words is all that was required. The picture is nice and would have been meaningful if only he had a much more meaningful and better constructed essay.

C27:    Imagine the world without flowers as decoration??? Mr King, the theme is new life, new birth, NOT flowers, color or decoration. 

C28:     I love love love the picture (i think the guy from c25 would have been able to adjust his write up to suit this picture better). The write up is also pretty meaningful, albeit the grammar faults but she went on for a bit too long and just managed to stop at that thin line between deep and boring.